¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽг»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

Homer

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ±è*¼º
2021-05-14 530

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

What is your best memory in school and why?

In school, my best memory was when I was in first grade in middle school. At that time, I was the first student who entrances since it's established. So, there's no uniform and senior student. I played all-around in the place and used every facility freely. So, I memorize the time as the best moment during my school days.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hi Homer! We all have good memories in school that we can cherish for a life time. Some of them may not be as good as we expect it to be but it let us grow to the person we are today. Thanks for sharing yours :) 

PS: I'm quite impressed with your writing skills. Keep it up! 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

In school, my best memory was when I was in first grade in middle school. 
>>CORRECT

At that time, I was the first student who entrances since it's established. 
>> At that time, I was the first student who entered that facility since it was established. 

So, there's no uniform and senior student. 
>> So, there's no uniform and senior students. 

I played all-around in the place and used every facility freely. 
>> CORRECT

So, I memorize the time as the best moment during my school days.
>> So I consider those times to be the best ones during my school days. 

¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
108815 My homework Àü*¼± ¿Ï·á 2021-05-25 394
108814 Today\'s homework ÀÓ*ÃÑ ¿Ï·á 2021-05-25 309
108813 Homework ÇÔ*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2021-05-25 1
108812 My roommate Á¤*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2021-05-25 477
108811 Homework {05/24} Â÷*ºó ¿Ï·á 2021-05-25 331
108810 Homework (289) ¹Ú*ÇÏ ¿Ï·á 2021-05-24 408
108809 What was your best travel experience so far? ÀÌ*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2021-05-24 642
108808 What advice would you give a foreigner visiting your country who... ±è*¿ø ¿Ï·á 2021-05-24 479
108807 homework of friday ±è*±¸ ¿Ï·á 2021-05-24 539
108806 homework ¹Ú*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2021-05-24 3
108805 A good ads? ÀÌ*ÇÏ ¿Ï·á 2021-05-24 410
108804 Cultures and traditions are different in each country so what... ÀÌ*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2021-05-24 664
108803 What part of your country would you ideally like to live in? ÇÏ*È£ ¿Ï·á 2021-05-24 368
108802 essay ¼Õ*¸² ¿Ï·á 2021-05-24 317
108801 grammar ¼Õ*¸² ¿Ï·á 2021-05-24 484
108800 homework Á¤*È£ ¿Ï·á 2021-05-24 0
108799 What is the best book you have read recently? Why did you like... ±è*ÇÏ ¿Ï·á 2021-05-24 391
108798 The cheapest way ¹Î*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2021-05-24 2
108797 Morning Calm Arboretum is probably the prettiest park. ±è*¶û ¿Ï·á 2021-05-24 336
108796 If you can sell anything from your valuable things, what would... ¿©*Áø ¿Ï·á 2021-05-24 0

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ ͏°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öư Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽбÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î Çϰí ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04