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What is your best memory in school and why?

In school, my best memory was when I was in first grade in middle school. At that time, I was the first student who entrances since it's established. So, there's no uniform and senior student. I played all-around in the place and used every facility freely. So, I memorize the time as the best moment during my school days.

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Hi Homer! We all have good memories in school that we can cherish for a life time. Some of them may not be as good as we expect it to be but it let us grow to the person we are today. Thanks for sharing yours :) 

PS: I'm quite impressed with your writing skills. Keep it up! 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

In school, my best memory was when I was in first grade in middle school. 
>>CORRECT

At that time, I was the first student who entrances since it's established. 
>> At that time, I was the first student who entered that facility since it was established. 

So, there's no uniform and senior student. 
>> So, there's no uniform and senior students. 

I played all-around in the place and used every facility freely. 
>> CORRECT

So, I memorize the time as the best moment during my school days.
>> So I consider those times to be the best ones during my school days. 

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