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Do you think that going to a private school is better than going to a public school? Why or why not?

I went to public school only, but I think going to private school is better. Because normally a private school is established for some specific purpose, so that those students who enter to there, can be improved more effectively. And in my guess, I think the curriculum is more optimized for the above reason.

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Hi Homer! Education is the key to success so we really need to invest on it. We have 2 options on how to attain it. There are private and public schools. Sometimes it depends on your financial state whether which one are you going to avail. Regardless of so, it still depends on the person whether they are going to study well or not. Not only should we focus on what school to go to, but also give encouragement to the students. :) 

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I went to public school only, but I think going to private school is better.
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 Because normally a private school is established for some specific purpose, so that those students who enter to there, can be improved more effectively. 
>>  Normally, private schools are established for some specific purpose. Students who enter is tend to improve their knowledge more effectively. 

And in my guess, I think the curriculum is more optimized for the above reason.
>> And in my guess, I think the curriculum is more optimized for the reason I just mentioned. 

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