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What\'s the best memory you have from your childhood?

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What's the best memory you have from your childhood?

When I was childhood, our family went on a trip every summer.
We travelled to different place something like mountain, sea and island.
In the past time, we didn't have a car, we always took a train or bus with backpack.
Now I think, it is a bit inconvenient trip, but we were happy and fun in my memory.

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Hi Monica! We all have good memories in school that we can cherish for a life time. Some of them may not be as good as we expect it to be but it let us grow to the person we are today. Thanks for sharing yours :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

When I was childhood, our family went on a trip every summer.
>> When I was a child, our family used to go on trips every summer. 

We travelled to different place something like mountain, sea and island.
>> We travelled to different places like mountains, sea and islands.

In the past time, we didn't have a car, we always took a train or bus with backpack.
>> Before, we didn't have have a car and we always took the train or bus with our backpacks. 

Now I think, it is a bit inconvenient trip, but we were happy and fun in my memory.
>> If I think about it now, it was a bit inconvenient to commute but we were happy and had so much fun in that memory. 
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