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If a person steals a loaf of bread because he needs to feed his starving family, should he be punish

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I think stealing food was for own family. but the punishment should be taken. Unlike the days when there was no food and it was hard to live. In the present era, food is abundant and the environment and quality of life are better. And it is true that the number of jobs and salaries are also higher than before. and Many organizations also provide volunteer work or aid to the hungry. I\'m sorry if can\'t work that much and don\'t have food, But I think it\'s even worse to violate a crime.

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Hi Steve! This is a very hard situation to be in indeed. There are usually times in our lives that emotions take over us and not realize that we are doing bad things already. Remember that no matter how hard our situation is, we should always be on the right path. Doing bad things won't make things any better. Thanks for sharing your opinion :) 

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I think stealing food was for own family. but the punishment should be taken. 
>> I think stealing food, even if it was for his own family, should be punished. 

Unlike the days when there was no food and it was hard to live. 
>> Unlike back in the old days, there was literally no food and it was very hard to live. 

In the present era, food is abundant and the environment and quality of life are better. 
>>In the present era, food is abundant plus the environment and quality of like is better.  

And it is true that the number of jobs and salaries are also higher than before. 
>> It is true that the number of jobs and salaries are also higher than before. 

and Many organizations also provide volunteer work or aid to the hungry. 
>>Many organizations also provide volunteer work or aid to the hungry. 

I\'m sorry if can\'t work that much and don\'t have food, But I think it\'s even worse to violate a crime.
>> I feel sorry that they can't work and provide for themselves but I think to commit a crime is much worse. 
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