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Do you prefer spending time with your family or friends? What would the world be like without famili

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I prefer spending time with my friends because we have same interests and a lot of things we can share and enjoy together. Also, I feel more comfortable when I'm with my friends than my family. I like my family but I think there's subtle different comfort between family and friends. And now I like the comfort that comes from my friends.
I can't imagine the world without families because all people have the time when they were kid or baby, and they need to be cared at that time. If there weren't family, human couldn't survive in the nature and make the civilized society. I think the existence of family and their caring is very important to someone's growing up.

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I prefer spending time with my friends because we have same interests and a lot of things we can share and enjoy together. 
>> I prefer spending time with my friends because we have the same interests and we can share and enjoy a lot of things together. 

Also, I feel more comfortable when I'm with my friends than my family. 
>> Also, I feel more comfortable when I'm with my friends than with my family. 

I like my family but I think there's subtle different comfort between family and friends. 
>> I like my family but I think there's a subtle difference in comfort between family and friends. 

And now I like the comfort that comes from my friends.
>> CORRECT!

I can't imagine the world without families because all people have the time when they were kid or baby, and they need to be cared at that time. 
>> I can't imagine the world without families because everyone started as a baby, and they need to be taken care of at that time. 

If there weren't family, human couldn't survive in the nature and make the civilized society. 
>> If there weren't family, humans couldn't survive in nature and make a civilized society. 

I think the existence of family and their caring is very important to someone's growing up.
>> I think the existence of family and their caring is very important to someone's growth mentally and physically.
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