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Q:What are the advantages of laughing a lot?
A:If a person laugh a lot, then that person can live a lot and that person can feel good in a lot of times.
First, many people say if a person laugh a lot, then the person can live a lot. so if a person laugh a lot then the person can live a lot.
Second, if a person laugh then that means the person feels good so if a person laugh a lot, then the person feel good in a lot of times.
Last, if a person laugh a lot the person can up himself when he feels bad because laugh a lot means the person feel good in a lot of times.

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Hello Paul,

  Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you. 

Keep up the good work!

Sincerely,
Teacher Annie (^^)



Q: What are the advantages of laughing a lot?

A: If a person laugh a lot, then that person can live a lot and that person can feel good in a lot of times.
>>> If a person laughs a lot, then that person can live a longer life and also feel good for a long time. 

First, many people say if a person laugh a lot, then the person can live a lot. so if a person laugh a lot then the person can live a lot.
>>> First, many people say if a person laughs a lot, then that person can live long. 

Second, if a person laugh then that means the person feels good so if a person laugh a lot, then the person feel good in a lot of times.
>>> Second, if a person laughs then that person feels good a lot of times and he will never feel sad. 

Last, if a person laugh a lot the person can up himself when he feels bad because laugh a lot means the person feel good in a lot of times.
>>> Lastly, if a person laughs a lot then that person can cheer himself when he feels bad because laughing a lot means continuously making yourself happy no matter what happens. 
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