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HOMEWORK:
What was the highlight of your weekend?

Just like I said during the class, my family including me went on a one day family trip to Guro-gu(city) in Seoul.
I will explain a bit about the trouble that happened before the nice trip started.
My family arrived at the hotel.
But the hotel was far from our expectations.
The atmosphere at hotel wasn't that good.
The hotel was gloomy, dark, and weird.
So thanking my father, he rented another hotel.
Actually, he wanted to celebrate their wedding annyversary in a nice place.
Happily, the second hotel was a six star hotel.
The name of the hotel is Sheraton.
The hotel built lately so the hotel got six star.
Also, we arrived at the second hotel lately, so the hotel cleaner couldn't clean the room up on time.
As the apologies the hotel staff upgraded the hotel room.
Thanking to the hotel, my family and I spent a great time at the hotel Sheraton.

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Hello Claire!
What a nice time you had in the end! I hope your parents were able to celebrate their anniversary in a special way. Your writing is really getting better. Keep up the good work! ^^
~~Teacher Kate

Just like I said during the class, my family including me went on a one day family trip to Guro-gu(city) in Seoul.
>>CORRECT!
I will explain a bit about the trouble that happened before the nice trip started.
>>CORRECT!
My family arrived at the hotel.
>>CORRECT!
But the hotel was far from our expectations.
>>CORRECT!
The atmosphere at hotel wasn't that good.
>>CORRECT!
The hotel was gloomy, dark, and weird.
>>CORRECT!
So thanking my father, he rented another hotel.
>>So, thanks to my father, we booked another room at a different hotel. 
Actually, he wanted to celebrate their wedding annyversary in a nice place.
>>Actually, he wanted to celebrate their wedding anniversary in a nice place.
Happily, the second hotel was a six star hotel.
>>Luckily, the second hotel was a six-star hotel.
The name of the hotel is Sheraton.
>>CORRECT!
The hotel built lately so the hotel got six star.
>>The hotel was built recently so it has a six-star rating. 
Also, we arrived at the second hotel lately, so the hotel cleaner couldn't clean the room up on time.
>>Also, we arrived at the second hotel late, so the room service couldn't clean the room up on time.
As the apologies the hotel staff upgraded the hotel room.
>>To  apologize, the hotel staff upgraded the hotel room.
Thanking to the hotel, my family and I spent a great time at the hotel Sheraton.
>>Thanks to the hotel, my family and I spent a great time at the Sheraton.
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