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If a person steals a loaf of bread because he needs to feed his starving family, should he be punish

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Stealing is a crime but those cases are a little bit different. Maybe he knew that he must not do that but there¡¯s nothing that he can do to feed his family. This is really sad story but there are still a lot of people who are starving. I think government should help him instead of punish him.

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Hi Heidi! This is a very hard situation to be in indeed. There are usually times in our lives that emotions take over us and not realize that we are doing bad things already. Remember that no matter how hard our situation is, we should always be on the right path. Doing bad things won't make things any better. Thanks for sharing your opinion :) 

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Stealing is a crime but those cases are a little bit different. 
>> CORRECT

Maybe he knew that he must not do that but there¡¯s nothing that he can do to feed his family. 
>> CORRECT

This is really sad story but there are still a lot of people who are starving. 
>>This is a really sad story but there are still a lot of people who are starving. 

I think government should help him instead of punish him.
>>I think government should help him instead of punishing him.

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