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Q:What other tips you can give to someone to fall asleep?
A:I can give a tip if I cannot sleep I just think about something that I want to, then I fall asleep faster then doing nothing.
First, I always don't know when I sleep, but one thing is sure that I was thinking about something that I want to think.
Second, I always think something that I want to think when I cannot sleep, then I fall asleep soon.
Last, I think it's because if I think something that I want to, then I'll fill good so I can fall asleep faster then doing nothing.

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Hello Paul,

  Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you. 

Keep up the good work!

Sincerely,
Teacher Annie (^^)


Q: What other tips you can give to someone to fall asleep?

A: I can give a tip if I cannot sleep I just think about something that I want to, then I fall asleep faster then doing nothing.
>>> One tip that I can give to someone who cannot fall asleep; just think about something that you want to, then you will fall asleep faster than doing nothing.


First, I always don't know when I sleep, but one thing is sure that I was thinking about something that I want to think.
>>> First, I always don't know when I fall asleep, but one thing is for sure that I was thinking about something that I want to before I fall asleep. 

Second, I always think something that I want to think when I cannot sleep, then I fall asleep soon.
>>> Second, I always think of something that I want to think about when I cannot fall asleep, then I'll fall asleep soon.

Last, I think it's because if I think something that I want to, then I'll fill good so I can fall asleep faster then doing nothing.
>>> Lastly, I think it's because if I think something that I want, then I'll feel good so I can fall asleep faster than doing nothing. 



*NOTE: Please remember that it's not last but it's "lastly". Another thing make sure that your not repeating the same idea and sentence again and again. 
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