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I am getting my energy from Almighty GOD.
GOD is my energy, my strength, the source of my life, my light, and my everything.
Next, my family is my energy too.
Everything in my family makes me do anything well.
Everything means like something love of family, family attachment, family's sympathy and others.
Addition, everyone who I love and love me makes me dance every day.

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Hi Eun Ha!
I can sense the passion in your writing.
I hope you can continue expressing yourself.
You have a gift and I hope you explore it.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I am getting my energy from Almighty GOD.
>> Correct
GOD is my energy, my strength, the source of my life, my light, and my everything.
>> Correct
Next, my family is my energy too.
>> Correct
Everything in my family makes me do anything well.
>> Everything about my family makes me do anything well.
Everything means like something love of family, family attachment, family's sympathy and others.
>> "Everything" refers to the love of my family, family attachment, family's sympathy and others.
Addition, everyone who I love and love me makes me dance every day.
>> In addition, everyone whom I love and who loves me make me dance every day.
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