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Kindly answer this question in essay form.
What are the things that people don't usually know about you?

Most people around me, especially my parents don't know that I was lived in the Philippines. My original plan was studying English in Australia and Canada, but I changed my mind to play at that time instead of studying. I didn't have such a productive time while I stayed in the Philippines in the middle of twenty. So, I don't usually talk about it to people around me.

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Hi Homer! There are things about us that others don't know. It's what makes us unique amongst others. Some of them are good and some are not. Only a few people may know it; most especially the close ones to us. Sometimes it's also good to not expose your entire personality to other people for the sake of privacy. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

Most people around me, especially my parents don't know that I was lived in the Philippines. 
>>Most people around me, especially my parents, don't know that I lived in the Philippines. 

My original plan was studying English in Australia and Canada, but I changed my mind to play at that time instead of studying. 
>> My original plan was to study English in Australia and Canada but I changed my mind. I just played instead of studying. 

I didn't have such a productive time while I stayed in the Philippines in the middle of twenty. 
>> I didn't have such a productive time when I stayed in the Philippines in my mid 20's. 

So, I don't usually talk about it to people around me.
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