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Kindly answer this question in essay form.
Do you think sending your loved ones to nursing homes is a kind of abandonment? Why or why not?

I don't think it is abandonment sending someone that I love, to nursing homes as long as there's sufficient reason for it. Everyone wants to be close to the loved one. But, in the point of realism, there's an obstacle thing.
Some romanticists and dreamers may say that everything can be overcome by love.
But, there will be some situations to send some specific place for a specific reason. For example, curing addiction, having a rest in a clean environment, etc.
So, if I love someone sincerely, sending abandonment is needed in the case for a specific purpose.

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Hi HomerThe reasons articulated by families for transferring their loved ones to nursing homes include the need for higher professional care, health care , behaviors associated with dementia and the need for more assistance. Some people agree with this method and some don't. Regardless of so, we should know the story first before judging these families. :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I don't think it is abandonment sending someone that I love, to nursing homes as long as there's sufficient reason for it. 
>>I don't think your loved ones to a nursing home is abandonment as long as there's a practical reason. 

Everyone wants to be close to the loved one.
>>Everyone wants to be close with their loved ones. 

 But, in the point of realism, there's an obstacle thing.
>> In reality, we face obstacles. 

Some romanticists and dreamers may say that everything can be overcome by love.
>> Some romanticists and dreamers may say that we can overcome everything with love. 

But, there will be some situations to send some specific place for a specific reason. 
>> But, there will be some situations that makes us do certain things. 

For example, curing addiction, having a rest in a clean environment, etc.
>> CORRECT

So, if I love someone sincerely, sending abandonment is needed in the case for a specific purpose.
>> So, even if I love someone sincerely, sending them to a nursing home is needed in case of specific purposes. 

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