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Kindly answer this question in essay form.
How did your parents raise you?

My parents cared for me like a flower in a garden. Especially, focused on educating for me. So, though it was not luxury, I didn't feel any lack of material resources. But, at that time I was immature and thought everything was just provided without any effort.
But, while living by myself, I realized that it comes from my parents' devotion and love.
So, I'm trying not to rely on them, and return it to them if possible.

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Hi Homer! We all undergone different childhoods because of our parents. Some may be good and some may not be as good. The way our parents raised us reflects on what kind of person we are today. Regardless of so, we should be thankful for their sacrifices. :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

My parents cared for me like a flower in a garden. 
>> CORRECT

Especially, focused on educating for me. 
>> They focused mainly in educating me, 

So, though it was not luxury, I didn't feel any lack of material resources. 
>> Even though our life was not luxurious, I still didn't feel that we lacked resources. 

But, at that time I was immature and thought everything was just provided without any effort.
>> Although at that time, I was immature. I thought that I could get everything without any effort. 

But, while living by myself, I realized that it comes from my parents' devotion and love.
>> When I lived by myself, I realized the devotion and love that my parents poured in me. 

So, I'm trying not to rely on them, and return it to them if possible.
>> CORRECT
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