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Q:What are the bad things that humans have done to destroy nature?
A:Humans threw many wastes to river and humans make a lot of gas so global worming is worse then before.
First, if people throw many wastes to river, then the river will be dirty so animals that living in the river cannot get fresh water.
Second, if people make a lot of gas, and gas will stay in sky, then global worming will be worse then before.
Last, if global worming is worse, then the temperature will be hotter then before so animals and plants cannot live like before.

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Hello Paul,

  Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you. 

Keep up the good work!

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Q: What are the bad things that humans have done to destroy nature?

A: Humans threw many wastes to river and humans make a lot of gas so global worming is worse then before.
>>> Humans throw a lot of wastes into the rivers. They also create a lot of gas that makes global warming worse than before. 

First, if people throw many wastes to river, then the river will be dirty so animals that living in the river cannot get fresh water.
>>> First, if people throw many wastes into the river and other bodies of water, then it will be dirty so the animals that are living in the river/water cannot live and eventually die.

Second, if people make a lot of gas, and gas will stay in sky, then global worming will be worse then before.
>>> Second, if people create a lot of gas that is harmful to the environment, and considering that these gas will stay in the sky, then global warming will be worse than before.

Last, if global worming is worse, then the temperature will be hotter then before so animals and plants cannot live like before.
>>> Lastly, if global warming is already worsening, then the temperature will be hotter than before so animals and plants cannot live like as before and they will die soon. 

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