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I like to ride a merr go around because It has carriage shape riding, horse shape riding . so i can ride beautiful riding. and I can take a beautiful picture with a merry go around.

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I like to ride a merr go around because It has carriage shape riding, horse shape riding . so i can ride beautiful riding. and I can take a beautiful picture with a merry go around.
>>> I would like to ride a Merry Go Round because it has a carriage where you can ride. 
        And you can ride at the back of the house like chairs. 
        Aside from that, it's a perfect place for taking a good picture. 
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