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What do most people do during Buddha's birthday there in Korea?

Buddha's birthday is a Korean national holiday, so most people don't work on that day. In the case of Buddhists, they go to the temple to participate in some kind of religious activity. But, for the others, it's just one of extra day to take a rest. So, most people go picnic or having some time with their family. In my case, I take a rest and sleep for a refresh.

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Hi HomerGenerally, holidays are intended to allow individuals to celebrate or commemorate an event or tradition of cultural or religious significance. Some people celebrate it and some don't but everyone can enjoy it by how they want. It's a time of relaxation so people are usually happy during these times. 

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Buddha's birthday is a Korean national holiday, so most people don't work on that day. 
>> CORRECT

In the case of Buddhists, they go to the temple to participate in some kind of religious activity. 
>> CORRECT

But, for the others, it's just one of extra day to take a rest. 
>>But for the others, it's just an of extra day to take a rest. 

So, most people go picnic or having some time with their family. 
>> So most people go on picnics or spend some time with their family. 

In my case, I take a rest and sleep for a refresh.
>>CORRECT

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