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Q:What is the most exciting thing when you go to shopping malls?
A:The most exciting thing when I go to shopping malls is Lego.
First, it's because I or my parents always buy Lego for my birthday present so I'm exciting when I go to shopping mall.
Second, I'm most exciting when my parents or I am going to buy Lego because if there is Lego, then I can make it so I'm most exciting.
Last, also it's because if there is Lego then I can put the Lego on my desk for decoration so I can see it when I wnt to.

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Hello Paul,

  Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you. 

Keep up the good work!

Sincerely,
Teacher Annie (^^)


Q: What is the most exciting thing when you go to shopping malls?

A: The most exciting thing when I go to shopping malls is Lego.
>>> CORRECT
OR: The most exciting thing when I go to shopping malls is finding Legos.

First, it's because I or my parents always buy Lego for my birthday present so I'm exciting when I go to shopping mall.
>>> First, it's because it's either my parents or I always buy Lego for my birthday present so I'm excited when I go to the shopping mall because of it.

Second, I'm most exciting when my parents or I am going to buy Lego because if there is Lego, then I can make it so I'm most exciting.
>>> Second, I'm most excited when my parents or I am going to buy Lego because if we can buy one then I can build with my new Lego. 

Last, also it's because if there is Lego then I can put the Lego on my desk for decoration so I can see it when I wnt to.
>>> Lastly, also it's because if there is Lego then I can put it on my desk for decoration so I can see it when I want to.
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