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Are you afraid of making mistakes? Why or why not?

My answer to today's topic can be both yes or no. I think it depends on the situation.

In terms of learning, I'm not afraid of making mistakes. As something that I want to learn is unusual, I think making a mistake is just one of the natural consequences of the learning process. So it's ok with me in this case.

However, I'm afraid of making mistakes a lot when I work.
If I make a mistake, it will not only affect me but also impact other people as many as I lead.
So, I always pay my attention fully and try to review myself as many times as possible before delivering my decision.
Besides, making frequent mistakes could be shown as an incapable person as well.
For these reasons, I am always careful not to make a mistake.

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Hi Homer! Mistakes makes us humans. We can't really control them from not happening in our life. What we can do is learn and reflect from it. It makes us better people. Although, we shouldn't make it a habit to do. :)

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!
My answer to today's topic can be both yes or no. I think it depends on the situation.
>> CORRECT 

In terms of learning, I'm not afraid of making mistakes. 
>> CORRECT

As something that I want to learn is unusual, I think making a mistake is just one of the natural consequences of the learning process. So it's ok with me in this case.
>> CORRECT

However, I'm afraid of making mistakes a lot when I work.
>> CORRECT

If I make a mistake, it will not only affect me but also impact other people as many as I lead.
>> If I make a mistake, it will not only affect me but affect the people that I lead. 

So, I always pay my attention fully and try to review myself as many times as possible before delivering my decision.
>> So, I always pay full attention and try to review myself many times as possible before delivering my decision.

Besides, making frequent mistakes could be shown as an incapable person as well.
>> CORRECT

For these reasons, I am always careful not to make a mistake.
>>CORRECT
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