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How is beauty defined in your culture?

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In the past, beauty was defined as the things that is very harmonious with nature.
Over time, lots of people wanted to defined beauty.
So scientists made the thing that is very beautyful, and it is called 'Golden Ratio'.
Lots of people thought 'Golden Ratio' is the real beauty.
So lots of artists made lots of paintings that are used 'Golden Ratio'.
But over time, lots of people thought 'the harmonious with color' is the thing that is very beautyful.
And now, everybody thinks the beauty as 'the things that I feel very beautyful.'.

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Hi John! In this world, there shouldn't be any beauty standard. Everyone should feel good in their own appearance. Like what they say, "Beauty is in the eye of the beholder". :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

In the past, beauty was defined as the things that is very harmonious with nature.
>> In the past, beauty was defined  to be very harmonious with nature.

Over time, lots of people wanted to defined beauty.
>> Over time, lots of people wanted to be defined  as beautiful. 

So scientists made the thing that is very beautyful, and it is called 'Golden Ratio'.
>> So scientists made something that is very beautiful and it is called 'Golden Ratio'.

Lots of people thought 'Golden Ratio' is the real beauty.
>> CORRECT

So lots of artists made lots of paintings that are used 'Golden Ratio'.
>> So lots of artists made lots of paintings using the Golden Ratio'.

But over time, lots of people thought 'the harmonious with color' is the thing that is very beautyful.
>> But over time, lots of people thought 'the harmonious with color' is the thing that is very beautiful.

And now, everybody thinks the beauty as 'the things that I feel very beautyful.'.
>> Now everybody think that feeling beautiful in  your own body is beautiful. 
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