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How is beauty defined in your culture?

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In Korea, I think standard of beauty is always changing. Before, we thought that people who have big eyes and big noses are beautiful. But nowadays people likw people who have their own attraction. So I think there¡¯s no defined beauty.

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Hi Heidi! In this world, there shouldn't be any beauty standard. Everyone should feel good in their own appearance. Like what they say, "Beauty is in the eye of the beholder". :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

In Korea, I think standard of beauty is always changing. 
>> In Korea, I think  the standard of beauty is always changing. 

Before, we thought that people who have big eyes and big noses are beautiful. 
>> Before, we thought that people who have big eyes and pointed noses were beautiful. 

But nowadays people likw people who have their own attraction.
>> But nowadays, people have different perspectives. 

So I think there¡¯s no defined beauty.
>> So I think there¡¯s no defined standard for beauty.

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