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What\'s your most valued possession?

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What's your most valued possession?

Actually, I don't have the most value possession.
In the past time, I used to have some luxury bag and oi treased it so much.
Now, i didn't bring it and the luxury bags are in the closet.
I don't want to obsess somthing, I live a free life.

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Hi Monica! Having valued possessions generates lots of positive feelings which make you feel good and enhance your mood, and even inspire or motivate you. It also give you sense of control; as you have ownership over precious possessions and this sense of control make you feel secure.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

Actually, I don't have the most value possession.
>> Actually, I don't have any valued possession.

In the past time, I used to have some luxury bag and oi treased it so much.
>> In the past, I used to have lots of luxury bags and I get teased by it a lot. 

Now, i didn't bring it and the luxury bags are in the closet.
>> Now, I don't use them and they are placed in the closet. 

I don't want to obsess somthing, I live a free life.
>> I don't want to obsess on something. I am living a free life. 
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