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What are the benefits of traveling?

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There are many things one can gain from traveling new places. We can get new friends, new stories, and new experiences. When we start to travel other places, we get better understanding about peoples living there, including their culture, and background. I think that one of the main benefits of travelling is relaxing from daily routine. We all have many stress and tension in our lives. Travelling forces us to temporarily disconnect from our normal routine.

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Good day, Sir Mandeep!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

There are many things one can gain from traveling new places. 
>> CORRECT!

We can get new friends, new stories, and new experiences. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> We can make new friends, new stories, and new experiences. 

When we start to travel other places, we get better understanding about peoples living there, including their culture, and background. 
>> When we start to travel other places, we get better understanding about people living there, including their culture, and background. 

I think that one of the main benefits of travelling is relaxing from daily routine. 
>> CORRECT!

We all have many stress and tension in our lives. 
>> CORRECT!

Travelling forces us to temporarily disconnect from our normal routine.
>> CORRECT!
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