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I like nike.
because there is al lot of simple and pretty T shirts
and also the backpack and hat is simple.
almost korean students like to wear nike.
so I like nike

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Hello Hanah,

  Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you. 

Keep up the good work!

Sincerely,
Teacher Annie (^^)


I like nike. because there is al lot of simple and pretty T shirt
>>> I like Nike because there are a lot of simple and pretty T-shirts. 

and also the backpack and hat is simple.
>>> Another reason is that their backpacks and hats are simple. 

almost korean students like to wear nike. so I like nike
>>> Almost all Korean students like to wear Nike, so I like it. 
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