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It's only been three months since I moved in this house. I also have two roommates first time in my life. They are really kind and I love them. One of them is really good at cooking. She doesn't cook very often and she only does for special day, like birthday party or new guests visiting. Her spaghetti is always best so if it is possible I want to make her cook everyday. First good points of her cook is always well seasoned even for everyone! Therefore every guests who visited our house love her cook, specially spaghetti. Nowdays, I ask her to try my cook because sometimes my cook is little salty. Second, she really tries various food! Spaghetti, noodles and fried mushroom are
best and she also makes new sauce with them. She said her family had run a restaurant when she was young and this is the reason why she can cook easily. I love my mother's food but her menu is little repeated. Because of these, when my roommate cooks something, I just jump out of my room and try her food!

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Hi Julia, thank you for this. Have a great day!
Jasmin

It's only been three months since I moved in this house.
>>It has only been three months since I lived here.
I also have two roommates first time in my life.
>>I got to have two roommates for the first time in my life. 
They are really kind and I love them.
>>They are really kind and I love the both of them. 
One of them is really good at cooking.
>>One of them is really good at cooking. 
She doesn't cook very often and she only does for special day, like birthday party or new guests visiting.
>>She only cooks on special occasions like birthday parties or if we have visitors at home. 
 Her spaghetti is always best so if it is possible I want to make her cook everyday.
>>Her spaghetti is always the best, if only I could make her cook it everyday, I will. 
First good points of her cook is always well seasoned even for everyone!
>>She has a secret recipe where she put a lof of seasonings and spices. 
Therefore every guests who visited our house love her cook, specially spaghetti.
>>Therefore, all our house guests loves the food she cooks, especially spaghetti. 
Nowdays, I ask her to try my cook because sometimes my cook is little salty.
>>Nowadays, I ask her to check the foods that I cook because sometimes it's a bit salty. 
Second, she really tries various food! Spaghetti, noodles and fried mushroom are best and she also makes new sauce with them.
>>She also loves to cook different kinds of foods. Spaghetti, noodles, and fried mushroom are the best especially with the delicious sauces she prepares with it.
She said her family had run a restaurant when she was young and this is the reason why she can cook easily.
>>She said that her family had a restaurant back then when she was young and this is the reason why she cooks so well. 
I love my mother's food but her menu is little repeated.
>>I love the food that my mom cooks but it is always the same. 
Because of these, when my roommate cooks something, I just jump out of my room and try her food!
>>That is why I'm quite excited when my roommate cooks something for us.  

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