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If i can sell anything from my valuable things, I would sell my travel experience.
Becase I like traveling and planning travel.
When I plan travel, I would plan most carefully.
however, I travel freely once I start travel.
I think I could give somone tip about travel.

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Hi Chloe!

Wow, you really are quite the traveler. You can use that as a side line. If I will go on a trip, I will surely ask you :) 

As well as being useful, our possessions represent our extended selves. They provide a sense of past and tell us ¡°who we are, where we have come from and perhaps where we are going.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

If i can sell anything from my valuable things, I would sell my travel experience.
>> If I can sell any valuable thing, I would sell my traveling experience. 

Becase I like traveling and planning travel.
>> It's because I like traveling and planning travel trips. 

When I plan travel, I would plan most carefully.
>> When I plan for a travel trip, I do it very carefully. 

however, I travel freely once I start travel.
>>> However, I travel freely once I start. 

I think I could give somone tip about travel.
>> I think I can be the perfect person to get tips from when it comes to traveling. 
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