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If you can sell anything from your valuable things, what would it be and why?

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I think the most valuable thing is health. I had a hard time during last week. I was sick and so scared. during sick, I didn't do anything. I just wanted to be healed. now I feel better than last week and I appreciate my daily life. I think there's nothing important than health.

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Hi Tobby!

Yes, you had a really hard time last week. Good thing you're already okay. :)

As well as being useful, our possessions represent our extended selves. They provide a sense of past and tell us ¡°who we are, where we have come from and perhaps where we are going.

PS: Kindly analyze the question more carefully. The question was about "things" so it can be anything like a book or clothes  etc. that you are willing to give away. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I think the most valuable thing is health. 
>> CORRECT

I had a hard time during last week. 
>> I had a hard time last week. 

I was sick and so scared.
>> I was scared and did not feel well. 

 during sick, I didn't do anything. 
>> I was not  doing anything during that time. 

I just wanted to be healed.
>> CORRECT

 now I feel better than last week and I appreciate my daily life. 
>> Now, I feel better and I appreciated life more. 

I think there's nothing important than health.
>> I think there's nothing more important than health.

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