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What are some of your bad habits and how do you think are you going to get rid of it?

My bad habits are, not doing work out at all and having dinner very late. As my work finished late even after 10 pm, I have dinner around midnight sometimes. Even in this situation, I felt well when I was in the 20s but recently I feel my health is getting worse as I'm already in the 30s. So, trying to have dinner in the company before 7 pm if my work is going to be finished late. And also before I entered my company, I used to play basketball and go to the mountains. However, nowadays I feel tired all the time, so I just try to take a rest on my day off. Since I started my work the first time, I gained a lot of weight. So, I think I have to find a way to release the stress from the work and do some workout as much as possible.

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Hi Homer!

Most of the time, bad habits are simply a way of dealing with stress and boredom. Everything from biting your nails to overspending on a shopping spree to drinking every weekend to wasting time on the internet can be a simple response to stress and boredom.

But it doesn't have to be that way. You can teach yourself new and healthy ways to deal with stress and boredom, which you can then substitute in place of your bad habits.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.


My bad habits are, not doing work out at all and having dinner very late. 
>> My bad habits are not working out and having dinner very late at night. 

As my work finished late even after 10 pm, I have dinner around midnight sometimes. 
>> Even if my work finishes at 10pm, I will have dinner around midnight sometimes. 

Even in this situation, I felt well when I was in the 20s but recently I feel my health is getting worse as I'm already in the 30s. 
>> Even now, I still feel like I'm in my 20's but I realize that my health is getting worse as I am already in my 30's. 

So, trying to have dinner in the company before 7 pm if my work is going to be finished late. 
>> So, I try to have dinner at the company by 7pm if I am going to work late. 

And also before I entered my company, I used to play basketball and go to the mountains. 
>> Before I entered my company, I used to play basketball and go hiking. 

However, nowadays I feel tired all the time, so I just try to take a rest on my day off. 
>> However, nowadays I feel tired all the time so I just try to take a rest on my day offs. 

Since I started my work the first time, I gained a lot of weight. 
>> Since I started working, I gained a lot of weight. 

So, I think I have to find a way to release the stress from the work and do some workout as much as possible.
>> So, I think I have to find a way to release the stress from work and do some workout as much as possible.

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