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Before I write this task, I can't sure that I understand certainly so, please understand if this task is out of the topic.
I think it's true because if you don't risk, you must stay there and can't change.
Almost all challenges to change have risks even if the challenge is not too big.
So people have to risk when they achieve something or when they want to escape their daily routine.

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Good job, Jun! Definitely, we are on the same page. Your answer is correct and it clearly explains the quote. Keep it up!-Faith-
Before I write this task, I can't sure that I understand certainly so, please understand if this task is out of the topic.
>> Before I wrote this task, I couldn't be sure if I understood it certainly so, please understand if this task is out of topic.
I think it's true because if you don't risk, you must stay there and can't change.
>> I think it's true because if you don't risk, you might just stay there and can't change anything.
Almost all challenges to change have risks even if the challenge is not too big.
>> Almost all challenges have risks even if the challenge is not too big.
So people have to risk when they achieve something or when they want to escape their daily routine.
>> So people have to risk anything when they want to achieve something or when they want to escape their daily routine.
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