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What are some of your bad habits and how do you think are you going to get rid of it?

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My bad habit is doing homework very late.
As almost students, I don't want to do a lot of homeworks.
Actually, I don't want to do hamework.
So I do homework at late time.
So I think I have to get rid of it by doing homework earlier then now.

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Hi John!

Most of the time, bad habits are simply a way of dealing with stress and boredom. Everything from biting your nails to overspending on a shopping spree to drinking every weekend to wasting time on the internet can be a simple response to stress and boredom.

But it doesn't have to be that way. You can teach yourself new and healthy ways to deal with stress and boredom, which you can then substitute in place of your bad habits.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

My bad habit is doing homework very late.
>> CORRECT

As almost students, I don't want to do a lot of homeworks.
>> CORRECT

Actually, I don't want to do hamework.
>> Actually, I don't want to do homework.

So I do homework at late time.
>> So I do my homework at a later time. 

So I think I have to get rid of it by doing homework earlier then now
>> 
So I think I have to get rid of it by doing my homework earlier than before. 

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