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What are some of your bad habits and how do you think are you going to get rid of it?

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What are some of your bad habits and how do you think are you going to get rid of it?

I have a bad habits of untidy on my room.
I often gather on my stuffs in one box.I always sort it out later.
I might be put my stuff in its place. I can't do it well.
My mom always said that your room is a mess.
My room is cleaner than in the past, I still need to use my room cleanly.

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Hi Monica!

Most of the time, bad habits are simply a way of dealing with stress and boredom. Everything from biting your nails to overspending on a shopping spree to drinking every weekend to wasting time on the internet can be a simple response to stress and boredom.

But it doesn't have to be that way. You can teach yourself new and healthy ways to deal with stress and boredom, which you can then substitute in place of your bad habits.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I have a bad habits of untidy on my room.
>> I have a bad habit of making my room untidy. 

I often gather on my stuffs in one box.I always sort it out later.
>> I often gather all my stuffs in one box and I always sort it out later.

I might be put my stuff in its place. I can't do it well.
>> I might just put it in the right place but I can't do it. 

My mom always said that your room is a mess.
>> My mom always say that my room is a mess.

My room is cleaner than in the past, I still need to use my room cleanly
>> My room was cleaner in the past. I need to make it cleaner. 
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