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What are you most scared of in your life and why?

I scare the most is, losing my passion and not being able to find my purpose even after few years. For now, I can maintain my passion to work, but the cycle of burnout is getting shorter for me. So someday, I want to do something that I really like and achieve remarkable results.

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Hi Homer!

Fear is one of the most basic human emotions. It is programmed into the nervous system and works like an instinct. From the time we're infants, we are equipped with the survival instincts necessary to respond with fear when we sense danger or feel unsafe.

Don't worry. You would find your purpose in life sooner or later :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.
I scare the most is, losing my passion and not being able to find my purpose even after few years. 
>> The thing that I'm scared the most is loosing my passion and not being able to find my purpose even after a few years later. 

For now, I can maintain my passion to work, but the cycle of burnout is getting shorter for me. 
>>For now, I can maintain my passion in working, but the cycle of burnout is getting nearer for me. 

So someday, I want to do something that I really like and achieve remarkable results.
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