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Do you think doing volunteer work is important? Why or why not?

I think it's important to volunteer to help. Because some of the people in our society are living a hard life whether they wanted or not. And, I think those people might not have enough energy to overcome their situation by themselves. So, I think if we gave even some help to them, it would be a great help.

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People choose to volunteer for a variety of reasons. For some it offers the chance to give something back to the community or make a difference to the people around them. For others it provides an opportunity to develop new skills or build on existing experience and knowledge.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I think it's important to volunteer to help. 
>> I think it's important to volunteer in order to help other people. 

Because some of the people in our society are living a hard life whether they wanted or not. 
>> It's because some of the people in our society are living a hard life whether they want to or not. 

And, I think those people might not have enough energy to overcome their situation by themselves. 
>> And I think those people might not have enough energy to overcome their situation by themselves. 

So, I think if we gave even some help to them, it would be a great help.
>> So if we give help to other people, it would mean a lot to the. 
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