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Do you think doing volunteer work is important? Why or why not?

I think it's important to volunteer to help. Because some of the people in our society are living a hard life whether they wanted or not. And, I think those people might not have enough energy to overcome their situation by themselves. So, I think if we gave even some help to them, it would be a great help.

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People choose to volunteer for a variety of reasons. For some it offers the chance to give something back to the community or make a difference to the people around them. For others it provides an opportunity to develop new skills or build on existing experience and knowledge.

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I think it's important to volunteer to help. 
>> I think it's important to volunteer in order to help other people. 

Because some of the people in our society are living a hard life whether they wanted or not. 
>> It's because some of the people in our society are living a hard life whether they want to or not. 

And, I think those people might not have enough energy to overcome their situation by themselves. 
>> And I think those people might not have enough energy to overcome their situation by themselves. 

So, I think if we gave even some help to them, it would be a great help.
>> So if we give help to other people, it would mean a lot to the. 
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