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Do you think it's good to share photos on social media? Why or why not?

I don't think it's not good to share our photos on social media. Once I upload my photos online, unknown people are able to access to see my posting, and it won't be deleted permanently unless I delete it by myself. However, as we are living in a flood of information, it's very difficult to memorize every our history online. So in some cases, there will be a situation that I didn't even remember, and it will be consequences left behind.

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Hi Homer!

Posting pictures in social media has been a very common activity for most of us. We share to other people the things that we do and experience everyday. At some point, it is a form of socializing and expression. Although, there should be limits because even the people whom we don't know personally can see our posts. We have to be vigilant and we should think before we click :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I don't think it's not good to share our photos on social media. 
>> CORRECT

Once I upload my photos online, unknown people are able to access to see my posting, and it won't be deleted permanently unless I delete it by myself.
>> Once I upload my photos online, unknown people are able to access to look on my posts and they won't be deleted permanently unless I delete it by myself.

However, as we are living in a flood of information, it's very difficult to memorize every our history online. 
>>However, as we are living in a place where there's constant information, it's very difficult to memorize our history through online.

So in some cases, there will be a situation that I didn't even remember, and it will be consequences left behind.
>> So in some cases, there will be a situation that I didn't even remember something, and there would be consequences. 
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