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Do you think it¡¯s good to share photos on social media?

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Yes, I think it¡¯s good to share photoes on social media. Because we can share some information about us and also we can make friend from it. Some people thinking that social media is useless but I think sometimes it¡¯s helpful for us.

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Hi Heidi!

Posting pictures in social media has been a very common activity for most of us. We share to other people the things that we do and experience everyday. At some point, it is a form of socializing and expression. Although, there should be limits because even the people whom we don't know personally can see our posts. We have to be vigilant and we should think before we click :) 

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Yes, I think it¡¯s good to share photoes on social media. 
>> Yes, I think it¡¯s good to share photos on social media. 

Because we can share some information about us and also we can make friend from it. 
>> It's because we can share some information about ourselves and we can make friends from it. 

Some people thinking that social media is useless but I think sometimes it¡¯s helpful for us.
>> Some people thinking that social media is useless but I think it's sometimes helpful for us. 

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