¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽг»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

Do you think it¡¯s good to share photos on social media?

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ±è*¿ø
2021-05-31 355

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

Yes, I think it¡¯s good to share photoes on social media. Because we can share some information about us and also we can make friend from it. Some people thinking that social media is useless but I think sometimes it¡¯s helpful for us.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hi Heidi!

Posting pictures in social media has been a very common activity for most of us. We share to other people the things that we do and experience everyday. At some point, it is a form of socializing and expression. Although, there should be limits because even the people whom we don't know personally can see our posts. We have to be vigilant and we should think before we click :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

Yes, I think it¡¯s good to share photoes on social media. 
>> Yes, I think it¡¯s good to share photos on social media. 

Because we can share some information about us and also we can make friend from it. 
>> It's because we can share some information about ourselves and we can make friends from it. 

Some people thinking that social media is useless but I think sometimes it¡¯s helpful for us.
>> Some people thinking that social media is useless but I think it's sometimes helpful for us. 

¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
108863 Wednesday homework ·ù*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2021-05-26 348
108862 1st homework JB ¼Û*ºó ¿Ï·á 2021-05-26 290
108861 Unusual food. ¹Î*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2021-05-26 276
108860 Actors and actresses ¹Î*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2021-05-26 2
108859 Some people think that it is a waste of time for high school... Ȳ*ÇÏ ¿Ï·á 2021-05-26 344
108858 What are some of your bad habits and how do you think are you... Çã*´Ã ¿Ï·á 2021-05-26 3
108857 If you can sell anything from your valuable things, what would... Çã*´Ã ¿Ï·á 2021-05-26 2
108856 Homework ÀÓ*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2021-05-26 3
108855 Number of foreigners in Korea slides to 50-month low À¯*Áø ¿Ï·á 2021-05-26 1
108854 How do you usually cope with stress? ³ë*ÀÌ ¿Ï·á 2021-05-26 1
108853 Homework ÇÔ*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2021-05-26 1
108852 Tell me about a strange dream you\'ve had. ±è*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2021-05-26 0
108851 Home work(5.26) ÀÌ*Àº ¿Ï·á 2021-05-26 330
108850 Home work(5.24) ÀÌ*Àº ¿Ï·á 2021-05-26 322
108849 Homework ÀÓ*¼÷ ¿Ï·á 2021-05-26 296
108848 Task ÀÌ*ÁØ ¿Ï·á 2021-05-26 335
108847 Home work ±è*¼ö ¿Ï·á 2021-05-26 1
108846 HOMEWORK ±è*¼º ¿Ï·á 2021-05-25 279
108845 HOMEWORK ±è*¼º ¿Ï·á 2021-05-25 285
108844 Homework (290) ¹Ú*ÇÏ ¿Ï·á 2021-05-25 322

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ ͏°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öư Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽбÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î Çϰí ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04