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What do you do when someone invades your privacy?

I don't have any experience regarding privacy concerns, but I think if it's happened to me, it would be very stressful.
Every people has their own way of life, and there would be something that doesn't want to be exposed.
So, I might feel uncomfortable if some invade my privacy without a valid reason. And, in terms of this situation, I would inform the one not to do the behavior, or report about it.

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Hi Homer!

When someone violates your right to privacy, you have a legal claim. To make that claim, you need to gather evidence of the invasion and notify the defendant to cease and desist his or her behavior. If you want to take the next step and sue, then you should meet with a lawyer, who can advise you on your legal rights.

Every person is entitled to have the right for privacy. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I don't have any experience regarding privacy concerns, but I think if it's happened to me, it would be very stressful.
>> I don't have any experience regarding privacy concerns, but I think if this happens to me, it would be very stressful.

Every people has their own way of life, and there would be something that doesn't want to be exposed.
>> Every people has their own way of life and there would be something that we don't want to be exposed in the public. 

So, I might feel uncomfortable if some invade my privacy without a valid reason. 
>> So, I might feel uncomfortable if someone invades my privacy without a valid reason. 

And, in terms of this situation, I would inform the one not to do the behavior, or report about it.
>> In terms of this situation, I would tell that person to not do that kind of behavior and report them. 
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