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Who are the 3 people in your life that you can't live without? Explain your answers :)

It's my mother, father, and my younger brother. No matter how close my relation with friends is, they can't replace my family. As my parents raised me until I became an adult, I always appreciate my parents about unconditional love. So for me, despite I don't express my emotion to them, my family is unreplacable.

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Hi Homer!

There are people in our lives who certainly have a special spot in our hearts. We need to value their existence and cherish their moments with them. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

It's my mother, father, and my younger brother. 
>> CORRECT

No matter how close my relation with friends is, they can't replace my family. 
>> No matter how close I am to my friends, they can't replace my family. 

As my parents raised me until I became an adult, I always appreciate my parents about unconditional love. 
>> As my parents raised me until I became an adult. I always appreciate my parents about their unconditional love. 

So for me, despite I don't express my emotion to them, my family is unreplacable.
>> So for me, even though I don't express my emotions enough, my family is unreplaceable. 
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