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Who are the 3 people in your life that you can\'t live without? Explain your answers :)

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I think I can't live without my parents, brother, and friend.
I can't earn money by myself because I'm not a grown up, so I can't live without my parents.
And I usually tease my brother, but he gives me fun feeling, so I can't live without my brother.
I need someone who is my age, and he or she could know about my feeling.
And my friend is one of that person, so I can't live without my friend.

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Hi John!

In our life, there are people who mean the world to us. Most of those are our family and friends. We cherish a lot of moments with us and they are the ones who usually helps us in times of need. That's why we need to value them as much as we can to thank them for being there for us. Thank you for sharing the important people in your life. :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I think I can't live without my parents, brother, and friend.
>> I think I can't live without my parents, brother, and my friend. 

I can't earn money by myself because I'm not a grown up, so I can't live without my parents.
>> CORRECT

And I usually tease my brother, but he gives me fun feeling, so I can't live without my brother.
>>Even though I usually tease my brother, I still have a lot of fun with him so I can't live without him too. 

I need someone who is my age, and he or she could know about my feeling.
>> I also need someone who is my age. That person should know about my feelings. 

And my friend is one of that person, so I can't live without my friend.
>> CORRECT
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