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What should someone do to be happy?

작성자: 노*희
2021-06-04 353

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To be happy for people, many needs have to be satisfied. There exist basic needs like clothes, house and food and high needs like social recognition. But regardless of these needs satisfaction, I think there is another thing to do to be happy. It is to go outside.
We don’t have to do something in outside. We can just walk around a park. It makes feel comfortable to go outside, breathe fresh air and look around.
I usually felt depression when I stayed in home long time because of covid-19. To cut a chain of depression and lethargy, I went outside and walked around the park for an 1 hour. As I had time to go outside, I could change my mood and depression disappeared. Based on my experience, people should make time to go outside to be happy.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Se Hee, thank you for this. Have a great weekend!
Jasmin 



To be happy for people, many needs have to be satisfied.
>>To be happy, many people needs a lot of things. 
There exist basic needs like clothes, house and food and high needs like social recognition.
>>Like our fundamental necessity such as  clothes, house, food, and social recognition. 
But regardless of these needs satisfaction, I think there is another thing to do to be happy.
>>Aside from meeting these needs, there are other things that can make us happy. 
 It is to go outside.
>>It is to go out there and seize the day. 
We don’t have to do something in outside.
>>We don't need to do a lot of things. 
We can just walk around a park. It makes feel comfortable to go outside, breathe fresh air and look around.
>>We can just walk around the park, breathe some fresh air, and have some peaceful sightseeing that can make us feel relax. 
I usually felt depression when I stayed in home long time because of covid-19.
>>Because of the pandemic, I feel depressed because I can't go outside and I need to stay at home most of the time. 
To cut a chain of depression and lethargy, I went outside and walked around the park for an 1 hour.
>>I go outside and walk around the park so I can reduce my stress and anxiety.
 As I had time to go outside, I could change my mood and depression disappeared.
>>I usually feel calm and less anxious when I am outside. 
 Based on my experience, people should make time to go outside to be happy.
>>Based on my experience, people should always have a sweet escape from reality. 
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