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I remind two things I appreciate in my life.
One is my family. My family is the root of self-esteem and stability.
The other is my friends. It's because my friends always give to me a good effect.

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Hello Chloe!
Thanks for sharing what you think. Friends and family members are truly precious things to us. Also, thanks for your time and effort writing this, See you next week! ^^
~~Teacher Kate

I remind two things I appreciate in my life.
>>I remember two things I appreciate in my life.
One is my family. 
>>CORRECT!
My family is the root of self-esteem and stability.
>>One is my family. My family is the source of my self-esteem and stability.
The other is my friends. 
>>CORRECT!
It's because my friends always give to me a good effect.
>>It's because my friends always have a positive influence on me. 
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