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Do you think it\'s good to share photos on social media? Why or why not?

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I think it¡¯s not good to share photos on social media.
because internet forever leave my information. someone will see the photos I share on social media and I think that person might use it badly. so if I want to share photos on social media I think it¡¯s okay to photos that are not my face.

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Hi Won!

Posting pictures in social media has been a very common activity for most of us. We share to other people the things that we do and experience everyday. At some point, it is a form of socializing and expression. Although, there should be limits because even the people whom we don't know personally can see our posts. We have to be vigilant and we should think before we click :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I think it¡¯s not good to share photos on social media.
>> I think it¡¯s not good to share photos on social media because information that you put there stays forever.

because internet forever leave my information. 
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE. 

someone will see the photos I share on social media and I think that person might use it badly. 
>>someone will see the photos I share on social media and I think that other people might use it badly. 

so if I want to share photos on social media I think it¡¯s okay to photos that are not my face.
>> So if I want to share photos on, I think I will post that ones that don't have my face in it. 
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