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Would you rather give money to beggars or buskers? Why?

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I think it¡¯s okay give money to beggars or buskers.
because buskers receive money by showing their talents to people on the street. and I think it¡¯s okay give money to beggars. because what he started begging on the street is he really very hard. so if I have ability I can help somebody, I help by giving money to beggars or buskers.

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Hi Won!

With more people suffering from homelessness, the general public may feel they wish to give cash to those sleeping rough. But some people say that handing over money to beggars "can have fatal consequences".

In terms of buskers, these are entertainers. They are pretty much the same with other entertainers you see on television. If one has entertained you, you can definitely give them money if you can. They did something that can benefit you, which is to entertain you. 

PS: Omg, you had a terrible experience. I feel so sorry to hear that :(

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I think it¡¯s okay give money to beggars or buskers.
>> CORRECT

because buskers receive money by showing their talents to people on the street. 
>> It's because buskers receive money by showing their talents to the people on the street. 

and I think it¡¯s okay give money to beggars. because what he started begging on the street is he really very hard. \
>> And I also think that giving money to beggars is okay because they in a very hard situation. 

so if I have ability I can help somebody, I help by giving money to beggars or buskers.
>> So If I have the ability to help other people, I would do so by giving money to beggars or buskers. 
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