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Q:What could be the effect of music on humans?
A:The effects of music on humans is music can make different how humans feel like.
First, if a human listen to a cheerful music, then the human feels good, but he listen to sad music hr feels not that good.
Second, some humans try to be good at playing music is one of effects of music on humans too.
Some human think if he is good at playing music, then many people will accept his skill, so some human try to be good at playing music.
Last, I think music gave a lot of gladness to humans and it gave a lot of good effects to humans.

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Hello Paul,

  Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you. 

Keep up the good work!

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Teacher Annie (^^)



Q: What could be the effect of music on humans?

A: The effects of music on humans is music can make different how humans feel like.
>>> One of the effects of music on humans is that it can give different effects on how humans feel.

First, if a human listen to a cheerful music, then the human feels good, but he listen to sad music hr feels not that good.
>>> First, if a human listen to cheerful music, then he/she will feel good, but if he/she listens to sad music then it will make him/her feel sad or lonely.  

Second, some humans try to be good at playing music is one of effects of music on humans too.
>>> Second, some people try to be good at playing music or singing songs; there are some of the effects of music on humans too.

Some human think if he is good at playing music, then many people will accept his skill, so some human try to be good at playing music.
>>> Some humans think that if he is good at playing music, then many people will accept and appreciate his skill, so some humans try to be good at music.

Last, I think music gave a lot of gladness to humans and it gave a lot of good effects to humans.
>>> Lastly, I think music gives a lot of gladness to humans and it gives a lot of good effects to humans in general.
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