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What's your motto in life?

I think the most important thing in my life is a relationship. Regarding relationships, I believe trust and respect are the most important so those are my motto.
Without trust and respect, we can't make sincere relations with other people. If there's no trust and respect between some people, they will suspect and gossip with each other always.

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Hi Homer!

A motto can help you change a habit. An essential aspect of willpower is the ability to remember your long-term goal. A motto can succinctly summarize why you want to change a habit and therefore increase your willpower.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I think the most important thing in my life is a relationship. 
>> I think the most important thing in my life is relationship. 

Regarding relationships, I believe trust and respect are the most important so those are my motto.
>> Regarding relationships, I believe that trust and respect are the most important thing so those are my motto.

Without trust and respect, we can't make sincere relations with other people. 
>> CORRECT

If there's no trust and respect between some people, they will suspect and gossip with each other always.
>> If there's no trust and respect between people, they will suspect and gossip with each other always.

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