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In the past, i’m a just nurse who doesn't think about any goals. But now, i have an aim what i want to live in The US as a nurse.for my future life. Actually i just want to live in there but, if i go to The US without any caution and some money, i’m sure i’ll mess right now what i was thought before. I started to hope such as future stories at 25years old. I think because of i heard that there are some differences between South Korean’s nurse to The US’s nurse. It is the most important for me to adopt for my life and it caused how i have to do from now. First, i need warrants what i need to pass ILETS,NCLEX exams. For these, i must study more harder, i was not that much confidence.
But after 2years, i joined an ILETS academy and i met several good teachers who are like an expert. i want to reach after 3years. Back then, i will 30 years old. Why is this goal important for me? The reason Why i desire to be authoritative nurse in The US. Finally, i hope that is a nurse who is a team lea

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Hello Hui Won!^^
Thank you for sharing your career goals. I hope that you can pass all your exams so you can fulfill your dream to become a successful nurse in America. Develop your confidence and believe in yourself!😉
Always,
Kelly😍
In the past, i’m a just nurse who doesn't think about any goals.
>> In the past, I was just a nurse who didn't have any goals in life.
But now, i have an aim what i want to live in The US as a nurse.for my future life. 
>> But now I have an aim which is to live in the US as a nurse for my future life.
Actually i just want to live in there but, if i go to The US without any caution and some money, i’m sure i’ll mess right now what i was thought before. 
>> Actually, I just want to live there, but if I go to the US without preparation and money, I'm sure that I will mess up and would end up unsuccessful.
I started to hope such as future stories at 25years old. 
>> I started hoping for my future after hearing some inspiring stories when I became 25.
I think because of i heard that there are some differences between South Korean’s nurse to The US’s nurse. 
>> I realized that there are some differences between South Korean nurses and the nurses from the USA.
It is the most important for me to adopt for my life and it caused how i have to do from now. 
>> it is very important for me to upgrade my skills which is what I am doing now.
First, i need warrants what i need to pass ILETS,NCLEX exams. For these, i must study more harder, i was not that much confidence.
>> First of all, I need to pass my IELTS and NCLEX exams. In order to get a passing score, I must study harder because I am not very confident right now.
But after 2years, i joined an ILETS academy and i met several good teachers who are like an expert. 
>> After two years, I would like to join an IELTS academy and meet good teachers who are experts in this field.
i want to reach after 3years. Back then, i will 30 years old. 
>> I want to achieve that goal in three years. I will be 30 years old by then.
Why is this goal important for me? 
>> Correct.
The reason Why i desire to be authoritative nurse in The US. 
>> The main reason is because I want to become an authoritative nurse in the US. 
Finally, i hope that is a nurse who is a team lea
>> My final goal is to become a nurse who can lead her team.
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