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Q:What could be the effect of music on humans?
A:The effects of music on humans is music can make different how humans feel like.
First, if a human listen to a cheerful music, then the human feels good, but he listen to sad music hr feels not that good.
Second, some humans try to be good at playing music is one of effects of music on humans too.
Some human think if he is good at playing music, then many people will accept his skill, so some human try to be good at playing music.
Last, I think music gave a lot of gladness to humans and it gave a lot of good effects to humans.

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Hello Paul,

  Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you. 

Keep up the good work!

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Teacher Annie (^^)



Q: What could be the effect of music on humans?

A: The effects of music on humans is music can make different how humans feel like.
>>> One of the effects of music on humans is that it could affect the feelings of the people listening to it. 

First, if a human listen to a cheerful music, then the human feels good, but he listen to sad music hr feels not that good.
>>> First, if a human listen to cheerful music, then he will feel good, but if he listens to sad music then he will feel sad or emotional. 

Second, some humans try to be good at playing music is one of effects of music on humans too.
>>> Second, some people try to be good at playing a musical instrument or in the music itself, it's one of the effects of music on us humans. 

Some human think if he is good at playing music, then many people will accept his skill, so some human try to be good at playing music.
>>> Some humans think that if they are good at playing music, then many people will like and appreciate their skill, so some human try to be good at music.

Last, I think music gave a lot of gladness to humans and it gave a lot of good effects to humans.
>>> Lastly, I think music gives a lot of gladness, happiness to humans and it gives a lot of good effects too.

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