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Q:Kindly answer this in essay form.
Should parents be held responsible for their children's behavior? Why or why not?

A:I think parents should take responsibility and take care of their children until the end.I don't think you should have children at all if you don't think you can take responsibility for them:)

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Hi Daniel!

Raising a child with good ethics and values is a tough task for every parent. Child¡¯s development is mainly affected by the education, he or she receives from parents. Some People argue that parent should not be held accountable for their child¡¯s act as every parent make their best effort to teach their child how to live and behave in society but how much he/she absorbs is not in anyone¡¯s hands. Every parent tries to provide the best environment, a good role model and more of attention and care to their children.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I think parents should take responsibility and take care of their children until the end.
>> CORRECT

I don't think you should have children at all if you don't think you can take responsibility for them:)
>> CORRECT
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