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Who are the 3 people in your life that you can\'t live without?

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My mom and sister is most important of my life and My friends on my phone background is also important to me. so it's impossible to include only one of them in the rest of three. so I'll let it be empty for my future wife.

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Hi Tobby!

In our life, there are people who mean the world to us. Most of those are our family and friends. We cherish a lot of moments with us and they are the ones who usually helps us in times of need. That's why we need to value them as much as we can to thank them for being there for us. Thank you for sharing the important people in your life. :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

My mom and sister is most important of my life and My friends on my phone background is also important to me. 
>> My mom, sister and my friends are the most important people in my life. 

so it's impossible to include only one of them in the rest of three. 
>> It's actually impossible to pick only one person in my group of friends. 

so I'll let it be empty for my future wife.
>> So the third spot would be empty until I meet my future wife. 
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